Tuesday, November 19, 2013

trance-y dances

Icy pellets of indifference splatter painted faces.
and a pretty face shows us all the way
to narcissism - i mean vanity or flattery or
what did the fox say?

My fingers twitch to type truth
to tap out more than stunted syllables
lacking focus, force, finesse?

Aggression isn't endearing, is it?
no, no, no ma'am
can you add a little sugar?
moralism always wants to win over grace
replace every ounce of empathy
with endurance
ah, the trance-y dance of zero chance is risky on its own, no?
(domo arigato, mr. roboto)

I want to feel, you know,
more than weather patterns and
i want to think in more than disjointed catchphrases
because life is more than
tweets and
sheets of sweet glaze standing between
you and me
and all that really matters

Cuz when the end comes
(or did it pass us by?)
i want to know, know, know,
you know?

More than whispers dropped carelessly 
or shadows chased aimlessly 

I need to

No, know, no.


Super excited to link up with dVerse today for some poetry fun. Have some poetry of your own? Bring it with you and stop by. You won't regret it. 


41 comments:

  1. I loved this! The wordplay is thought provoking and clever! And love the song references! My favorite is the first stanza! What did the fox say? :)

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to pop in - and for your nice words :) Hope you'll be back in the poetry pool soon!

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  2. This is poetry fun! Thanks for sharing. Thanks also for your comment over at Janette's blog. it's great to meet you! :)

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Karen! I look forward to reading your book :)

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  3. Yes, this says to me - life passing without any real interaction, a barrier between us all the time, such banality - strive to get past it, live a little... thank you.

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    1. I really do struggle with the triviality we've all embraced as meaningful, Colin. The push and pull of it all overwhelms me often. But it's not like I don't participate in the madness myself. I just sometimes want more.

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  4. Wow Lori, you have made some important points about connection vs lack of connection in a real and present way…at least that is what I am reading here. Thanks for your kind comments on my blog… I do hope you'll send me a few words of gratitude for this year's quilt…. instructions are at the top of my blog if you want to learn more about it.

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    1. You're reading it right, Laura :) And I will definitely participate. I just popped over to read the instructions, so I will make sure to send my words of gratitude. Sounds like a wonderful project!

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  5. This is worth thinking about.. you dived deep into what's important in life. Really a very good write. The narcissim that turned into a religion... really well described.

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  6. yeah...life is def. more than thinking in weather patterns...ha..love it... think it's a curse of our fast paced time that we think in catch phrases and don't think things really through....the looking deeper...wanting to see the whole picture.. a good thing..

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    1. I can sustain the quick pace for a little while, but then I have to hop off the merry-go-round before I get too dizzy, lol

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  7. That is very well written. Thought-provoking and with an understanding of human mind. I certainly liked it. :-)
    -HA

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  8. Love this! So good to see you here again Lori. :)

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    1. Thank you, Ayala! I've missed you all :)

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  9. i want to think in more than disjointed catchphrases
    because life is more than
    tweets


    Sign me up for some of that real interaction - the old face-to-face messaging that people used to do ... smiles

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    1. I really do believe we're creating new social disorders every day, but we'll have to see where my theory falls out after the dust settles :)

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  10. I LOVE this... Mirroring many of my own feelings lately. We will never know, but keep trying, again and again, that is where life lies.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by :) I have to keep trying even if there's a few breaks in between!

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  11. ah i want to feel as well...and not le tthe catch phrases dumb life down to where i dont have to chew it for myself...did you really go to what does a fox say...i think i lost a few brain cells there...ha....

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    1. Sorry about that, but you know I had to go the lowest point. I think I found it, lol

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  12. You powerfully express your longing for feeling and meaningfulness Lori! It is so easy to hide behind catchphrases and miss the reality behind the words.

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  13. This is so truly beautifully and imaginatively written. absolutley loved it :)

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  14. Lovely. Soc media wastes minds that could be feeding on good reading like this.

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  15. Tweets are ideal for those who don't have much to say--a challenge for those who need to distill big thoughts without losing the essence...in any case, make it real, that's what I hear you saying. I get it. Sometimes hard to hack through the artificiality of modern life...we're all thirsting for meaningful experience, and we get Keeping Up With the Kardashians,

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    1. Yeah, I don't want to seem like I'm so above the fray. I mean, I've lapped up more than my share of meaningless television. I just sometimes really struggle with the social media circus. But is there anyone out there who doesn't? I doubt it :)

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  16. Oh, I hear you with this, Lori. With so much senseless noise all about us in our world, we really need to take the time to focus on what is important and real.

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  17. Life and the stupid crap can sure weigh heavy, have to try and let it go and then enjoy the real stuff at our show

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    1. You're right, Pat. Sometimes you gotta just let it all roll off your shoulders :)

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  18. This makes me feel ironic that I just tweeted you...

    But we're all searching for something deeper surrounded by so much that is plastic. Very nice capture.

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  19. Oh, I was so hoping you would be sharing more of your gifted poetry! Love the message of it.

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    1. Thank you so much, Mindy! I sometimes am afraid it will scare people away. I appreciate the encouragement :)

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  20. Lori,
    Yes! So very grateful, life is more than tweets...Thank God :)

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  21. LOVED this! You're very gifted lady, yes indeed! :-)

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